From the Glittering Desert of the South to the market streets of Nexus, the slave Kalara knew only that she would live a hard and a short life.
An unexpected kindness releases her from the cycle of cruelty, only to inspire her towards dreams a slave was never meant to have, dreams even the gods could not ignore.
But would such ambition bode good...or ill?
(Don't get used to this synopsis, as it will probably change a few billion times!)
Welcome to the reader's blog for The Uncrucified, an Exalted fanfiction! My goal is to make this story the best it can be and for that I need you!
Here are a few tips for helping me achieve my goal!
Here are a few tips for helping me achieve my goal!
What I AM looking for:
The draft featured on this blog is still a rough draft. I need the help of readers like you to polish the story to its finest before letting it loose on the world! Here's the kind of info I am looking for from readers:
- Character logic. Do my characters and their motivations make sense? This is the most important thing I'd like feedback on!
- Story logic. Is any part of this story difficult to understand (especially for those unfamiliar with Exalted?)
- Lore corrections. Is my 2nd edition lore correct? (NOTE: This story relies mainly on 2e lore, except where the Guild is involved. I referenced Manacle and Coin heavily for this aspect of the story since it has the most in-depth information on The Guild and slavery, which feature heavily in this tale).
- Setting descriptions and accuracy. Is my description of the world accurate? Sometimes I will also include original concepts or my own interpretations of the more vague areas of the rulebooks, but I like these to remain as on-theme as possible!
- Writing technique. How's my writing style? Does it flow? Is it difficult to read or understand?
I am looking for constructive criticism where the lore of the world is involved. If there's a problem with my accuracy to the lore, I appreciate a suggestion in the form of a brief description and the page number and rule book I can refer to for further reading.
The major plot structure of this story was already established in Kalara's original memoir and likely won't change, so there are some things which probably won't change based on feedback. Here are some of the things that you don't need to worry too much about while you read.
What I'm NOT looking for:
The major plot structure of this story was already established in Kalara's original memoir and likely won't change, so there are some things which probably won't change based on feedback. Here are some of the things that you don't need to worry too much about while you read.- Grammar corrections. Let's let someone else worry about those unless they are supremely blaring! I would like readers here to focus moreso on the overall meat of the story, instead.
- Suggestions for the overall plot. The main events are already well established. I'm more concerned with making sure that the dots connecting those main events are working properly than I am completely switching plot directions. Suggesting small changes to smooth the course of main events is fine. Suggesting big changes that alter the main character's fate entirely aren't helpful.
Other things I'd love to hear about:
- What did you enjoy?
- What are your favorite scenes/characters?
- Who did you love to hate?
How to Leave Feedback:
- You can comment on each chapter's entry in the most current draft (which is the Beta Draft).
- OR you can comment on the Google Docs of the chapters where you can leave comments directly linked to parts of the story. You can also download ebook versions of each chapter within the Google Docs.
Now, without further ado, let's get to reading!
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